Mr Bush (Page one)
WWW: Very engaged essay with a wealth of research
LR: Make some reference to Genre theory (Altman, Steve Neale etc)
Shivani (Page two)
WWW: Excellent use of Media Terminology and a good way of linking the theories to the point being made; a lot of great knowledge about the topic
EBI: Fix some capital letters upon the names of the movies i.e. The Human Centipede/Saw
Peer assessed level: 4
Self Evaluation (Overall)
Level: 3
Score: 30/48
Reason for level 3:
- Significant research has clearly been undertaken, employed in the investigation and detailed in the bibliography, making use of a range of academic, media and contextual sources. (however I believe there is some slightly improvement possible here for the use of academic books not just the research of them)
- The Investigation demonstrates knowledge and understanding of media concepts, contexts and critical debates relevant to the chosen area of investigation.
- The work is appropriately presented with a functional bibliography/source lists.
Actual score for 1st draft: 34/48 level3
Actual grade for 1st draft: B-
Kiran (Page 3)
Level: 4
WWW: Covered key concepts well, good use of quotes
EBI: Add in more about Institutions and Ideology
Rohit (Page 4)
Level: 3
WWW: Good use of social context and theories added to back up points, good use of theories too
EBI: Use of political impact on theories, link to politics and economic compared to social context
Anil (Page 5)
Level: 3
WWW: Very good use of certain critical debates such as media effects and regulations, censorship and links with theorists made points very strong.
EBI: Try look at more concepts such as media technology and the digital revolution
Anil (Page 6)
Level: 3
WWW: Very detailed and interesting
EBI: Links could have easily been made
Matthew (Footnotes)
Level: 3/4
WWW: Great use of footnotes and labelled correctly
EBI: Find longer footnotes that you can express a longer and better point on
Dupinder (Bibliography)
EBI: Remove page numbers, separate books and magazines, rearrange alphabetically, order of each section needs to be Books - Newspapers & Magazines - Internet - Moving Image Texts and have at least 10 books in works cited.
Simran (Intro/Conclusion)
Conclusion could link better to the question. End more strongly to the question e.g. talk about what impact it has on audiences.
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